User blog comment:JoshSelma5667/The Book of Genesis: Part 1- Chapters 1-3/@comment-1777104-20180504203030

You need to break these sections into paragraphs, otherwise, you have what some call a "wall of text". It is like you are in a monologue speaking non-stop without breathing.

One thing in the overview: "And every day He LOOKS at His creations and SAYS IT’S GOOD " -- actually, on day two nothing was actually created or made. It was a day of spreading out the heavens. Consequently, it seems, there was nothing to pronounce good on that day.

I will wait to see an edit of the format before attempting further comment. Thanks for contributing.